My Text-based Game (draft made with cards)

After having read out my story to my classmate, he said that the gameplay was smooth, fluent and there was no dramatic jumping around the narrative. He also mentioned that he found it easy to follow the story which was helpful. He thought that there were no places that needed more choices added, however there is not real big decision that changed the story dramatically which he thought was a good thing. However there was one action that I had forgotten to continue with so I must add in that choice. He thought that within Twine, the timer would be helpful for the more action packed events towards the end, also sound effects would help create a nice atmosphere.